by JBEdwards
She's fucking stupid. The 5 guys should have gangbanged her slutty carcass. 3 at a time. Steve's a fool.
Dragonrider
Writing humor is very hard. This attempt failed, but thank you for your efforts.
I don't remember ever giving a story just one star, but this one deserves a zero. Unrealistic, dehumanizing, disgusting, neither lit or erotica, yes it sucks. One almost expected that Steve was next going to have all his friends pee in a bucket and ask her to drink it.
To Mr. Anonymous of May 21: Thank you for your feedback. It does however seem just a tad harsh, at least to me. JB
1* for author's passive-aggressive, whiny response in comments. Grow a thicker skin. If an author can't handle honest feedback, turn off comments,
This author's fragile ego interprets anything other than five star glowing praise as too harsh. Tough. This story was a miss. Put on your big boy undies and deal with it like an adult instead of whining in comments.