All Comments on 'Badass Ch. 02'

the story is flowing well and I hope that you keep going

The story is coming along nicely but i would love it if the chapters were 3-4 pages long. you should check over your grammar, etc. but overall it was good. The story is pretty cooll and now i cant wait till the ch. 03!

omg I am loveing this story please hurry with the next one Please!!!!!!!!!!!

It's so different from the usual fare available here. I'm loving it! Pls continue with more updates and hurry!!

The names lol the alpha girls father McMillian or something and the Mac Corp that really made me laugh. But other then the names I'm liking this so far looking forward to the rest

An anime-like story about a super strong guy, who behaves like doesn't care about anything. I liked it.

But there are still some flaws you need to get past. Stop listing information, for a start. It really kills a story to read four paragraphs in which the author talks directly to the reader about history. Your other issue is run on sentences. Commas aren't omnipotent. And the reason youre running into that issue is because youre throwing down too much worthless detail in some cases. So far we know what he's eaten for every single meal. Not just what, but how much. How pany pieces of chicken and how many fries and that he plans to eat leftovers for breakfast....it's just not important. I really do think an editor would be good for you, despite your efforts, not because of spelling and punctuation placement as much as overall flow of your writing.

Keep it up!

comment on 3/7 said pretty much what i felt.

Main example was when the waitress was telling him about the alpha, the information was OK but it was not a natural way of speaking, more like someone reading out a memo than an actual conversation.

That aside its an entertaining story

wonderful story line so far. nothing wrong with detail,so long as they are the right ones. a writer need lots of details to paint a mental picture and you are doing fine so far. only thing i see is maybe proof read for spelling and grammar.

keep up the good work

This is badass.

I am truly enjoying your story, it is very creative. You arr very detailed and informative, with every of this story line, I just wish it was set up as if we were watching everything instead of being told or bring read to. Your characters dont seem to be interacting with one another, like real events would suggest, but more like, he's tell a quick story or reading it. Other than that, im truly enjoying it. Thank you for sharing your creativity with all of us. Wish you much sucess.

kinda reminds me of deadpool but less bat shit crazy.

I love stories where the main character is overpowered. Great change of pace from stories where 'our hero' has some great realization about themselves after being beat up a few times and then can suddenly beat up the main antagonist with ease.

Love how this story is snapping up! Every chapter has captivated my attention more and more. Keep it up!

Vdrh good, very interesting. really clever, goot detail in fighting and properly badass haha

JC

I can't wait to read the next chapter! I love it!