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DionysosK.
Vdrh good, very interesting. really clever, goot detail in fighting and properly badass haha
JC
Love how this story is snapping up! Every chapter has captivated my attention more and more. Keep it up!
I love stories where the main character is overpowered. Great change of pace from stories where 'our hero' has some great realization about themselves after being beat up a few times and then can suddenly beat up the main antagonist with ease.
kinda reminds me of deadpool but less bat shit crazy.
I am truly enjoying your story, it is very creative. You arr very detailed and informative, with every of this story line, I just wish it was set up as if we were watching everything instead of being told or bring read to. Your characters dont seem to be interacting with one another, like real events would suggest, but more like, he's tell a quick story or reading it. Other than that, im truly enjoying it. Thank you for sharing your creativity with all of us. Wish you much sucess.
wonderful story line so far. nothing wrong with detail,so long as they are the right ones. a writer need lots of details to paint a mental picture and you are doing fine so far. only thing i see is maybe proof read for spelling and grammar.
keep up the good work
comment on 3/7 said pretty much what i felt.
Main example was when the waitress was telling him about the alpha, the information was OK but it was not a natural way of speaking, more like someone reading out a memo than an actual conversation.
That aside its an entertaining story