by dourdan
This was truly awful. The story line, the technical writing skills (or lack thereof) and the thoroughly unlikable characters add up to a zero.
1 star only because negative stars aren't yet available.
I'm not sure where it started- probably in this chapter- but your series began to remind me vaguely of "Going After Cacciato". It's fascinating, your story. I'd have loved to discover it just as you finished so I could read it straight through. I'm sure I'll re-read it from start to finish eventually. Do keep submitting chapters. I'm hooked!