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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

Need an editor.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

Not bad at all for a new writer, although a bit cheesy for my taste.

HOWEVER, if you want your readers to take you seriously, you need to take them seriously.

From the amount of errors, I conclude that you don't do that sufficiently. You must either proofread very carefully yourself or find an editor.

krazicat99krazicat99almost 2 years ago

Re-read your story when it is finished. You have far too many errors in punctuation, tense, and word usage. You need a person to help you grow your talent; which is very strong in you. If you would like, I would be glad to help. I have been proofing and editing books, articles and stories for years. My e mail is krazicat99@gmail.com

curt6986curt6986almost 2 years ago

needs lots of editing but you can tell a really good story...

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I’m a university student and write erotica in my free time. I’m always looking for new ideas and will do free writing commissions if I like the subject or am bored enough. I thrive on both criticism and praise so if you like something please leave a comment or message me ...