All Comments on 'Beaudry's Realization'

These stories always seem to veer in to male submission.

If you are writing about a female sub, your audience doesn't want to hear about the detailed male submission in the middle of the story.

It feels like a bait and switch.

Also, either properly label the flashback or drop them..it breaks the immersion when you are suddenly talking about different characters/settings.

This story felt all over the place, way waaaaay too many names to keep track of in this short of a story