by huelust
moreeeeeee pleaseeeeeeee.wid a little more erotica.amazin story!!!
Wonderful contrast of wording to action here. I love the way the passion builds and seems an unstoppable force of nature. One sexy, intelligent lady!
Let me count the ways...
The snapshot treatment: I really appreciate the way you told the story in vignettes. In each chapter it seemed as though you had a director's eye and pace for building to the climax of a scene and it was easy to visualize this story playing out on the small screen like a Lifetime movie.
A realistic romantic lead: It's great to see a love story, especially an interracial love story, with a white romantic lead who is developed. So often the white guy is a rich, cardboard "Fabio type" with "the bluest eyes ever seen" but no flaws, no struggle, and no consideration for the fact that he's dating a woman of color. "Luc" is the kind of guy most women would lust for, but he clearly is not Mr. Right, and his choices and evolution as a character, make him far more interesting than the typical romantic lead who goes from alpha male hunk to chump because he get's a little booty.
Ethnic beauty: I love that you feature a beautiful and believable woman of color that isn't "passe blanc". It's nice to actually read an interracial story where African features are appreciated. After all, what's the point of calling a story interracial when the characters are aesthetically and culturally so similar?
There were a few editing issues, but this story was memorable for hot scenes between beautiful and fleshed out characters, with real life conflict and a believable resolution.
I hope you continue your good work, and ultimately get paid for it. You deserve it.
I wush you'd let us rate it - it's soo good
The other series is just as great!
You are an amazing writer!! You have me wanting more and burning up with desire. Great job!
~CreoleCutie
Even after all these years. This was one of the first stories I ever read on Lit and it's still one of the best! Question, why are there no star ratings for this? I'd love to give it 5 stars!
The sex part is ok, but the fact that he kind of forced himself on her is a bit of a turn off...I mean, she said "no" and he took advantage of her drunkness...Not OK!
Hmm, a little tired of the whole will only be in an interracial pairing if it's reluctance scenario. But anyway, notes for future aid: dancers don't eat potato chips regularly- your body is your instrument and its fuel has to be supreme; dancers generally don't kkeep their pubic hair because it'll show through leotards; and dancing 'til your feet bleed or likewise is a given if you're any type of artist who seriously wants to make it.
That was one of the hottest,first part of a series that I desperately want to read!
I mean,I love how innocent she is from the start,but no one can't control how their body reacts when becoming aroused,and damn!! With she being a professional dancer,when he was buried in her & she 'danced on his dick' I almost lost it myself! Dear lord what a feeling that would be :)
With that said,
Great first start,ccamt wait to read the rest of this series....