All Comments on 'Best Friend Got Tipsy'

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TGC140TGC140over 1 year ago

I had trouble keeping track of who was talking. It would help if you used a new paragraph each time a different person talked.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Agree, use separate paragraphs to differentiate a different person is talking.

Otherwise not a bad story.

AnonymousAnonymous3 months ago

What a mess. I couldn't keep track of who was talking which is frustrating so I didn't finish the story. Basic proper formatting goes a long way.

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