by MsQuote
I am loving the raw sex and the erotic images of the gushing wetness.
Good imagery and an interesting plot. Very descriptive sex scenes--I like it. Looking forward to the next chapter.
very creative writer
fun to read
sometimes it is difficult for a good writer to re-read enough to catch all of the subtle errors
in my opinion anonymous opinions are cowardly
It reads fine to me.
"Professional media writer aspriring to conquer the world of erotic fiction" from your bio.
You have to be fucking kidding! You NEED an editor, I can't read any more of your writing, is English a second language for you? That's how it comes across.