All Comments on 'Betting People: Machine Lust'

Why was Sawyer written as being so stupid as to be almost retarded? His cheating slut wife controls and manipulated him for 10 years! He must have been walking around with a blindfold on the entire time not to get some idea of what his wife was doing. Then his "friend" Stacy and her BFF friend Terah (also constantly called Traci) continue to control and manipulate him.

You desperately need an editor or just someone else to read over what you write. There are many, many sentences that have words missing that would be picked up by anyone simply reading the story.

A nice idea destroyed by terrible writing. Missing words, particularly verbs, incorrect words, though using hymn instead of hem was amusing, name switches, you name it, it was there. Try reading it out loud and you’ll see.