All Comments on 'Bianca's Choice Ch. 03: The Epilogue'

- correctly capitalize proper names and titles,

- punctuate sentences, contractions, possessive word forms and dialogue,

- choose the accurate form of homonyms, (their v. there v. they're).

Then you should re-write this and re-submit it.

Spelling... Microsoft Word is a writer's best friend.

Punctuation... see above comment relating to Word.

Sentence Structure... again.

Not a bad story, but with the errors I noticed, it made what could be a great story a bit better than mediocre. Find an editor and utilize them.