All Comments on 'Biology Class'

When you DON'T use contractions, your dialog can begin to sound either way too formal, or like we're listening in on a conversation between two people who learned English as a second language and don't know HOW to speak conversationally. When I'm reading a story like the one you've written, I sometimes start to imagine the people speaking to one another are Indian. If I reach that point, it's game over. From that point on, they sound to me like Kuthrapoli on Big Bang Theory speaking to Abu on The Simpsons.

By the end of this one, they were practically doing a Bollywood dance number.

"I will meet you outside the bathroom in a few. I won't be long."

"Ok I will wait for you over there at the end of the hall."

"Do you think it is possible you might want to go out for some curry?"

"Absolutely, yes, I do think it is possible to go out for some curry. I would like to have some curry. Definitely."

"That is wonderful. I would definitely like to go for some curry. The more curry, the better. Would you like to go together for some curry?"

"Definitely. I would love to go together for some curry."

"I would love to go together for some curry, as well. Definitely."

All Bollywood critiques aside, this was fun. Will wait patiently for the next.

Can't wait for the next chapter!

I have a hankering for some curry!

Good work. Nice start. 5*

Excellent story line, just about believable, which is where it should be. Some of the construction is a little curious, but we are not all US badly educated. If it worries you get an editor, but I wouldn't be concerned myself. Chapter two please.

A great erotic story of risk and reward. Can't wait for the next rewards...ha ha