All Comments on 'Bipartisanship and Romance Pt. 01'

Needs a bit of editing, for example, Patients are what Doctors try to help while Patients need a lot of Patience to deal with Doctors. There are one or two other whoopsies too.

In the next few hours some grammar nazi will descend upon you without mercy... There is no denying you need someone to proof read this because your spell checker failed to tell you that patients are different than patience. But I think patience with your writing is in order. Here is a secret, the best grammar nazi who isn’t a good story teller will probably never learn to be a storyteller. A good to great storyteller can learn grammar. One is a born with gift, the other is a learned skill. You have the gift.

A very good story, I just wish that we return the old school ways of political discourse, our policy may differ, however, we respected each other and were friends off from senate. Things were a whole lot better and good things got done.

comment. Not bad for a first attempt. But you need to have someone else read and edit it as there are too many distracting word substitutions that, while I was reading, break the flow.

you need an editor.

I really enjoyed it and look forward to seeing it develop. Luckily I can read past small errors without having kittens.

Great story. I'm not going to hammer you like some folks, but you need an editor, (or a better spell-check program). I recommend Grammarly. It's about a hundred bucks and has a free trial. Otherwise, you're a good writer. Maybe you can find an editor too.

What do the protagonists look like? Hair color, eye color, height... Details like these help a story come to life in more dimensions. I love the series, but would really like it more fleshed out, so to speak!