All Comments on 'Birthday Party 01'

by zeefee

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mel_pomenemel_pomeneover 10 years ago
Not at all bad ...

... especially as a first offering. I look forward to seeing where this one will go - but please watch the length of your paragraphs; they are in danger of rendering you story unreadable.

Welcome to Literotica, thank you for your story and please have three stars for it.

zeefeezeefeeover 10 years agoAuthor
thank you!

thankyou for your input, let me know how you like the 02 part of it when it gets posted!

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