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AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
Good Start to this Story

Please continue, I think you have made a good start. I look forward to much more

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
Hooked

I am hooked. Great beginning.

Cant wait to see the rest.

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
GREAT START

KEEP GOING IT HAS REAL PROMISE!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 3 years ago
Promising

The story is fairly promising, but the grammar is a huge turn-off and really jerks readers out of the atmosphere you are building. Perhaps an editor could make your life easier?

sweetone66sweetone66about 3 years ago

I agree with the previous comments... this story has promise, but you need a good editor.

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