All Comments on 'Blood Summer Pt. 01'

I think your keyboard is broken... The comma button exists for a reason.

The premise isn't bad, but the grammar here is so rough that it entirely distracts from the story, which is the LAST thing you want to do as a writer.

I'm surprised that no one has criticized the lack of warning or Tag for that bit of Incest between the Narrator and her sister toward the end of this chapter.

Sorry, I can't read this. The grammar and phrasing is just too difficult to parse. Pity, the premise seemed interesting.