by darkangel001
I don't like stories written in first person. They just turn me off. It's not very creative.
Who the hell are you, A_gentleman_lvr, to diss this story because it isn't written the way you like? And in what world does creativity end when you use first person? I just checked out your extensive list of stories and found...........NOTHING!
I suggest you get off your high horse until you have submitted your own collection of highly rated 2nd and 3rd person stories. And in the meantime, after just a few paragraphs you should know how a story has been written so if it is 1st person, just quit and keep looking.
Great story, darkangel001, hopefully the last sentence means HE does her, although I didn't get that idea.
dezurtdawg
We humble authors appreciate the support! However, I am currently rising to the 'challenge' of writing a third person erotic story, rather than 1st/2nd person pornographic fantasies. I do feel that for the purpose of blatant fantasy scenarios more direct modes of address provide greater subjective access (if less 'creativity'!).
I absolutely loved your story even though it was written as if you were talking to the reader. It was easy enough for me to pretend I was doing this to a man I wanted to please. I LOVE this story! No criticism here. Flawless.
Thanks very much!
Very sensuouly written. A gem of a story amongst mountains of stuff that is just a waste of time.