All Comments on 'Bonding with Daddy: Dinner Date'

Often too wordy. Get the thought on the page and stop; the extra words are repitious.

Reread, or proof read; these areas will present themselves to you, the you can trim out the extraneous words, streamlining your essay and heightening readability and reader comfort.

Through the broken English it was still a good story albeit short. Very erotic. I feel another chapter coming on. 5 stars