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cuck shit.

Even the computerized comment gets it right.... 1*

The premise was good. Everything else? Horrible! I hate being a grammar nazi but this was so bad as to be unreadable. I wish Lit allowed a zero. One star.

How much education does it take to post Cuck Shit on every story every day???

Delete and start over. Or just give up.

For example:

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The boys saw me and ran out scared I laughed Amy was still eating kathis pussy I walked over to kathi my dick in my hand she looked nervous I said no prob I was fucking Amy during your show as she was still getting her pussy eaten I walked behind Amy and fucked her some more I then blew my loud in Amy's pussy she begged me to blow it in her.

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One sentence!

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You don't know how to write a simple sentence. You don't know how to write or punctuate dialogue. (Here's a hint: quotation marks are required.) Possessives and capitalizing are a little tricky, because you get it right with Amy but not with Kathi. Based on the last one, I'm not sure if you're illiterate or you just don't give a fuck about your own story or the readers.

Really? What a shitty story! What is missing? @carolinedreamer giving his stupid advices about how to write well.

I mean... it has everything!!

Terrible grammar!

Run on sentences!

Poorly described scenes!

Choppy scene transitions!

If this isn't a contender for the best story I've downvoted today, someone's going to have to up their game to beat this one!!!

See above.

I feel like I just stepped in dog shit after reading this. Good thing I was wearing boots.

Don't care about gramma or whatever just that this was great story.

Don't embarrass yourself by posting anymore. Either learn to write properly or get an editor to straighten out this mess of words.