by mostlyintact
i loved the way you wrote i got a great understanding of the feelings between the principles good stuff
Excellent job. I really love D/S when it is written well and this was very enjoyable. This is the kind of erotica I wish I could read all the time.
I really enjoyed this. Very hot, I liked how genuine it felt, and the gentle use of humiliation. It's a shame it ended so quickly, though.
I really appreciate the time you took to leave me some feedback, and I do agree that the ending does feel very rushed.
Love from,
mostlyintact
Pretty nice writing foir a first effort! Let's see some more, whether a continuation of this story or another one.
I enjoyed this. Thanks. Nice vignette... seems believable. Ending is a bit abrupt... how wet was her face after you pulled off ?
A great first go, I do get a lot of pleasure from reading emotive script such as yours *smiles* Hope you can share more of your fiction and that some of them turn into reality for you.