All Comments on 'Brain Development Enterprises Ch. 05'

Amazingly hot series. Chapter one started out a little cheesy and there's still a little cheese but can't wait to see what he does to Kenzie next & her friends as well as what he'll do to his wife.

Love all the chapters so far can’t wait to see what happens next I will hate when this comes to an end

I love this story. There’s enough Mind Control to make it interesting but not too much which tends to make such stories boring. I’m glad you’ve kept to this one. Keep it going.

Imagine the surprise of another great chapter in this awesome story! Thanks for sharing, and for all your efforts. JT

I really love the fact you add to the story, the way he fights the hypnosis and that he doesnt just behave as if he would be 18 but a grown up man, please continue the story ( i check daily for updates )

Love your character development.

BDE is destined to be an all time Mind Control Classic.

This story is getting better by the chapter. The problem is I've given you 5 stars since chapter 1, so by now I would be giving you nine stars.

Have not read a series this good in a while. Keep up the great work. Looking forward to the Next charter.

Thank you! That kind of encouragement means a lot! haha

Wow! What a motivational thing to hear. Cheers!

Thank you so much, Casteller1985! Always nice to know you enjoyed it.

I'm so flattered to hear you're checking daily for updates! I'll try to write faster, haha.

You're so welcome!

I'm glad you're able to appreciate the cheesiness of the story but also the other aspects. I worked hard so that there would hopefully be less of one and more of the other. :)

Fantastic story! You are a very talented story-teller.

You can help me...

Hey! It's JC, and I'm here to ask for your professional support.

Have you enjoyed reading my web novels? Do they give you hours of entertainment? Then please consider supporting the artist who wrote them.

If each person who read all the way through one of my novels paid $3-6 (about the price of a bag of potato chips, and less than half the cost of a paperback book) then I would be able to continue writing indefinitely. As it is, my current trajectory will have me drastically cutting down on my writing volume within the next 6 months.

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With much love,

JC

Letting your wife fuck another dude when you could have stopped it isnt very alpha like

Careful, John. You can get a girl pregnant with your precum! 😮

your begging for money after each chapter is more than annoying

I support you begging for money JC! It is waaay to hard for writers to make money, even though a story as good as this should be making a hell of a lot of $. I would pay u, but I’m kinda poor, so.

Interesting change

looking forward to see how John takes care of the asshole boss. great smashing by the Dad. luv sex.

Several 20 packs of beer under his arm? Not likely. Your story kind of sucks because it's not at all believable, in a variety of ways and levels.

Should be interesting to see how he takes care of his wife. Forgiveness, turning her in a cuckquean? (At least temporarily). Then her boss. Ah, that could be interesting

At this point who cares about the wife? Not needed anymore. Her boss can keep the cheating slut. Maybe he can keep her around to watch as a little cuckquean that never gets to experience the fucking herself. That would be a fitting fate I think.

the purpose of the party a little uncertain as the results seem sketchy and the direction of the story seems to lose its way

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