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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 5 years ago
Good... but typo gremlins

An interesting beginning and finishes with a hint of mystery...

A tweak or two required... e.g. paragraph 7... "at him ass he carried..."

I look forward to finding out where the tale heads.

tallblondeMtallblondeMalmost 5 years ago
Don't be a tease!

Don't be a tease like that bratty boss, give us a taste to keep us coming back for more! Great start!

manfrombritainmanfrombritainalmost 5 years agoAuthor

@TallblondeM it's waiting to be published, i already uploaded it!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 5 years ago
Talented

Very nice start, but as (not ass) TallBlonde said, this short tease will owe you some comments torments :)

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