All Comments on 'Breakfast at Michelle's'

The story is pretty good, but I would advise that you proof read or get an editor. A few misspellings and misplaced words. Other then that pretty good. Keep going, I'm interested in how this turns out for Michelle.

I get that Michelle is a sub but it would be great for her to have a personality and agency over herself a bit because she reads as a puppet child instead of a young woman nervously exploring something new. Nash and Theo are interesting and carrying the story thus far as oppose to Michelle who comes off as rather dull. Hopefully as the story progresses so will Michelle. But the story is interesting so keep going.

I like it so far and feel like I could relate to Michelle in many ways. Always willing to please a dom but at the same time I want to see her personality outside of Subspace shine through. To learn more about Theodore as well. I hope you keep it up. 😊

i felt like this was a good start. i feel like i kinda relate to michelle. i think proofreading a bit more would help the story flow better. Excited to see whats next.