All Comments on 'Breaking the Rules and a Hot Summer'

The dialogue is boring and inane. "I got Dr Pepper, Shiner, and water" does not arouse interest. I skimmed and there was nothing interesting about the story.

Halfway through Page 2 the story started all over again and repeated itself...

...somehow I don't think that was what you intended !

You might want to check to see what you actually posted, as you may have lost a big piece of your story.

Is anyone really THAT stupid?

Get a serious editor!!!!!

2 stars

Try reading your stories before publishing or get some one to do it for you. You repeated the story!

That wasn't the first by long and not the last that she had broken the rules showing she after all had no respect or love for her husband! Why they are still married is a mistery!

Ok story, except, it was repeated again? Copy and paste? Who’s Diana? Yeah," Dianna nodded as if Jerry could see her. "And when we started this, you said you wanted a vantage point.

3⭐️⭐️⭐️

Repeating the story made it doubly bad.

Literotica double posted the story.

Liked it

"This is not cannon."

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I would hope not, since cannon is a type of artillery and canon is the authentic parts of a story directly from the author.

@EastCoaster1 AH! I didn't notice that! Thanks!

Thanks for the read

The initial seduction seemed realistic. The custard truck reverence is novel, and amusing if not erotic.

At least the whore is having a good time. Wonder what the half life is for a marriage when you're married to some dumb ass that enjoys you fucking other men?

its a decent enough story, but the very sloppy editing was a major distraction and reduction in stars. Keep writing, you got this!

Swingers, cucks, cheating whores, voyeurs and assholes. You pretty much covered every piece of shit in LW,, except Jamal. The whore did decline ass to mouth. She’s got that going for her.