All Comments on 'Breeder Group'

first of its kind. outstanding.

Love how the asshole got what he deserved

So, if you rape women but keep track of them and their offspring, that's ok, but if you do the same thing but don't care about them then that's not ok? Just a little hypocritical isn't it?

And to think, one basket ball and a basket ball court could have prevented all this.

you're pissing off the ass w/o a name!

Would love more chapters as i don't think Mr Big I Am would leave it there after his snippetty snip somehow. PJ xx

has a new pen name.

This story has a lot of promise. I hope that you continue with it. My one criticism is that the story seemed to be sort of choppy. I got the impression that you wanted write the story a certain way, possibly futuristic with the narrative somewhat cold and without emotion. This is fine but your plot shouldn't suffer. It needed more detail. At first I had no idea which breeder group Johnson was a part of until he was strapped down to a gurney and you wrote that the other breeder group had captured him. Being mysterious is also great but you have to let the reader in on enough of the plot to make the story interesting and make sense. Still a very imaginative start which I hope continues

The author shows excellent writing ability, imagination and enough confidence to omit the crude language used by many male writers here. If critics use rape or the racial angle to pan this, its only because they don't appreciate a good essay among this sea of mediocrity. Hey man, don't quit now!

The author shows excellent writing ability, imagination and enough confidence to omit the crude language used by many male writers here. If critics use rape or the racial angle to pan this, its only because they don't appreciate a good essay among this sea of mediocrity. Hey man, don't quit now!

Stroke story for twelve-year olds.

Typical Blank and yes with an N black story of a male so weak he needs cowering women. Nice next step he is so scared of women he is not man enough to have a relationship with them.

Once caveat, child support. Go ahead and breed away, but the Wilt Chamberlain tarts learned to file court papers to take males for all they have in child support.

This story was not well written. It was a void of intelligence and pure moron due to the fact is powerful males move on past sex into real realms of gratification. Power is the aphrodisiac and not dirtying up some white chics in revenge for their lack of ability in life.

Pathetic.

We promised not to tell anyone. Now it's public info...

hi just a quick note to all the critics why all the fuse everytime a writer decides to write interracial it is only a story and somtimes the writer only writes a requested story with that theme. if you dont like the stuff do not read the story

duanep

I like the idea the story line was a bit sketchy but it shows promise and a thinking mind I would like to see it broaden out a bit and have more of the same but with a stronger story line

For one, the whole idea of the war between the breeder groups was very fresh and new. More so of a gangish, or mob type life. Knowing those back grounds it is not hard to see the link between controlling and protecting territory. Even in the idea of females being territory. As for the negative comments, You know, some people will never understand writing or hidden desires of some. I think you have hit on many of them in this submission.

It is power many seek in someone and that same power that scares them. But all the while a want and desire. After reading the orginal and now this one. I say Keep on writing! I thought it was a great read and could have kept the slow torture of Johnson lingering a bit more. But all in all I loved it..

Peace and do what you do..

Mik

Makes you think of if there are truly groups out there such as these. Conspiracy theories and all that. As for the racial angle it gives it favor, and apparently something to talk about for many of you. Keep writing, can't wait to see what you follow up with next...

he should not have gotten cought. :(

Interesting idea about the breeder groups - quite original. Actually, I think this is a story concept that could be expanded out to something longer if you wanted.

Overall the story was good, but it lacked a few things to make it great. Your grammer needs some clean-up, and the sex scene was too abrupt. Better descriptions of the players involved would have been nice, and perhaps more background into the Breeder Group and Mr. Knowles.

Keep writing though, you have some tallent.

Hell yea!

This is one of my favourite stories on here. I love fiction where things are completely turned on their head at the end. Seriously, full five stars for this.

I love it, I think interracial marriage/breeding is perfect and the best part about it is that it's something that no one can prevent, you can try to stop it but it will always continue on. Very well written and enjoyable, especially considering the fact that I am the result of an interracial union myself . And to all the anons commenting on here with your racist shit, go fuck yourselves if you don't have the balls to at least show who the hell you are so people know who the scum of the earth is !.

I couldn't change my response. It's a 5!

Very twilight zone.

Uhh...you pro-interracial breeding/marriage types realize that Jenna was probably on the pill since she was a plant, right? No one got knocked up in this story, and the black man got castrated. I would think you would be livid.

I guess the racial theme is one that I should probably resent. I mean castration of a black man is sort of cliché at this point but I guess I assumed that it is not just one race of breeders that needed to be stopped. Assholes like Johnson are universal and come in all nationalities. I wish all real men would step up and do something with abusive fake men.