by mseg14
Thank you. There are more parts in existence, they just need a bit of polishing.
I didn't think a Western - especially European - people would pick up this theme! I thought this was more popular to my nearby neighbor of East Asian geeks, really glad you did pick the similar tone.
Nice beginning, looking for more of it. Really expecting the twist will appear up in future updates!
very fun story, I think you balanced setting the scene and giving some hot content well. For their being 2 sex scenes in this size of a story it really was captivating.
Haha, I liked this. Brisk, original, nice description of place and character. Well done.
Story is very good but even for a "an extravagant daydream" it needs more story between the sex scenes. Keep up the good work.
Really, Prince Cumagan, lol. Ok onto the next chapter. So far really entertaining.
Stories told in second person become cumbersome to the reader. Count how many times the word "you" was used in this chapter and you will see what I mean. First person works best and third person can make a good story but second person just doesn't cut it very well.
I know it might be a bit cumbersome, but in my imagination as well as in the writing it became “you” and it will most probably stay that way.