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AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
to formal

You are too stilted and formal in your dialogue. Loosen up a little....

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I took to writing erotica for the reason that I would have sole control on how the story ends and what my characters will do. However I was surprised to see that some characters have a mind of their own and act accordingly beyond my original intentions. Case in point were Lind...

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