All Comments on 'Brian's Loss Pt. 03'

So the mother and sisters' plan was to do nothing? Also, everything past the wedding was just awful.

One of the best stories I have ever read!!!

Could not finish. A big drop in quality from the first two. I agree with Jonny that everything after the wedding (at least until the point I gave up) was absolutely terrible.

I loved your story, it even made my eyes leak at some of the emotions. You write a wonderful tale of love BigmadStork. I wonder if Janet is going to make a baby or even some of his sisters.

Great story.

Your crazy wonderful imagination continues. Loved it.

One of your best...

I loved the story in general, what it was about etc, gave it 4 stars. I do agree that it was odd that chapter 2 had the mom and sisters working on a plan about Maryann and chapter 3 nothing had happened until the neighbor stepped in although I did enjoy the payback wedding part. The mom had upgraded the security to try and catch Maryann after the backyard phone conversion the neighbor heard but mom never reviewed any recordings?

The whole Toby thing seemed unnecessary although I guess it did allow the introduction of Janet. Just think there could have been a different way to introduce Janet and that story line felt somewhat forced especially with the revenge gang rape of Toby.

Those are minor complaints overall. I think what was most distracting to me was the writing style. It felt somewhat choppy, and then, and then, and then. More reporting on the story rather than the story flowing.

You have me in fucking tears the end! Loved the story but the diversion to pay back Toby was just that, a literary diversion. Really good read although I would have liked one more page to have the "ever after" ending that had Janet giving birth to their new family's child/children. Always great work - thanks for the entertainment! 5*

Excellent! Hows 25 stars? lol

Chapters one and two felt a little divorced from reality, this took that feeling and ran with it. Sorry, but not your best in afraid.

Brilliant story, loved it

It started off great but in the third part you seem to rush it. You should have broken it down into two more parts. It was to long to read at one sitting. I gave it 4 Star cause I did like but if you do a follow up to this story please take your time and and keep each pat to 2 or 4 pages.

This is one of the greatest stories I have read on here. Keep up the good work.

Wonderful story! Took a long time to read (constant family interruptions) Ha!

this is the best kinda story good job

This was a fantastic story, I loved the detail in all the characters with backgrounds and emotions. Very well written.

As always a brilliant piece of writing. I like the fact that he was a normal size and everyday Joe so to speak. I thought it was going to be tough keeping track of everyone but with all the details you supplied it was a very nice read. Thanks again for always providing a great story.

Well done pretending, good grammar, fine editing. What else have you got. You have our attention.

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thats a great story

I have read many of the author's series.

I will not judge the grammar. I don't know English well myself and I read the stories with the help of an online translator. ;)

The author has his own style and thoughtful plot of stories. But at the stage of implementation you get mistakes. The story is not written gradually developing. It's like a Lego constructor. You write individual scenes, episodes, dialogues. Then they are combined more or less in the order of the development of the plot. And then there is the finished story. But it's like a child putting together a Lego set. Everything looks right, like the picture on the box. But here the car has no wheel, the house has an extra window, the oak tree has a pine branch.

It's annoying. I want to erase and rewrite everything.

The big plus ( or minus ) is that all the stories are over and have an epilogue.

I just recently started reading your works and found them well written and immensely entertaining. This story was no exception and was a joy to read even though it started out in a dark and sad place you by involving his mother, his sisters and his mother-in-law made the story come to life. I loved how you had the sisters love and protect him from Mayr Ann until the end when he married Janet with Hollies ring (Nice Touch) and they lived happily ever after. Well done. 5/5

that is a lovely story you had here

What a beautiful story. Love it. Also the very last sentence, brilliant. AAAAAA++++++

Loved the story only two things I now want to hear is maybe a paragraph of him meeting here mom and the actual embarrassment of what happened and maybe a like couple years later when they have there own kids also maybe triplet boys 😁

I thoroughly enjoyed this story. Good job!

Awesome!

This was my second read. This is a beautiful love story that I really enjoy reading. Very well written, with great characters, witty dialogue and very erotic! ;-p

Great story! Thanks for sharing.

One of the best long-form stories I've read on here. Well done!

This is an amazing and awesome story,,, 5⭐️ story,, I loved the very last part ,, with,, mom I have to pee ,,, 😂

I couldn’t put this one down! Wonderful piece of work.

Bigmadstork, buddy, you're a fraud. Bigfluffyteddybear sounds more like it. Good story. XXX Hallmark. Brian will probably still be as clueless as ever, but happy as a clam. 5/5 stars for this chapter :-)

Great story

What a clusterfuck. This was such a convoluted mess and horrible to read. Your writing deteriorated the longer the story went on and at times if felt like the ramblings of a mad man. You drifted away so much from the main story you suddenly worked a prior never heard before trauma in and it get's resolved in mere minutes.

Beautiful, touching story, and perfect...Yea a few mix-ups of editing where a name was confusing, but didn't stop the story.

Loved it. That is all that I need to say.

Wow! Great, intense story!

5 stars

While I loved the overall story, it was a hard to read. It was choppy, and a bit flighty and inconsistent in the telling. It was also difficult to tell just who was speaking all throughout the tale. 5 for the overall story, 2 for the way in which it was written... 3.5 overall from me.

Loved this series the sadness and all the love sharing was awesome one more page with them having more children would have been nice and did he continue to have sex with his sisters?? 5 stars

Quite the tale. Absolutely LOVED it. 5 BIGGGGG stars.

loved it. by the end, i was crying just as much as they were.

Dam test jerker and dam good.