by victoria.vixen
Your attitude, his firm yet mild control, it all worked. beads are great, so many options. I had a client share a sweet ass story, with her dom dad. It was in ways similar to your story, but keep writing, your style works on me! Tim
This is a very erotic three-part series, made even moreso by the writer's unique style. She made me believe that this event actually happened, which greatly enhanced my enjoyment of the tale . . . as well as the tail! Nicely done, Victoria.
Very nice, very nice indeed. There were a couple spelling//grammar mistakes, but who cares ;) Wonderful story!
Before reading your work I believed that asides would detract from the stories. You have the ability to incorporate them into the story while keeping the reader involved. Not only involved, but they serve as a reminder that this isn't a fantasy, but a reminiscence. Thank you for a terriffic story.
Literotica isn't letting me sign my name automatically. I am TacRich.
I always smile when people doubt what can and cannot be accomplished with a stick of butter.
Are there no empiricists among the skeptics?
It was difficult to follow the action or the scene around her. The only thing that I could consistently follow was what was happening to her asshole. Why is a different mattter. Why did the inhumanly named X choose the butter and the oversize beads. I find it hard to believe that a stick of butter got shoved into a closed asshole, but I have never tried it.
It would make for easier reading if the dialogue was broken out as separate paragraphs as dictated by convention. But a good first effort and I will look forward to reading more from this author.
Oh what a lucky stick to slide into this story! You will love the rich buttery taste as well! Keep them cumin!
I liked your using the actress so that we could better imagine the object of Xs affection. I immediately googled her images; very hot! The butter was great, although it would have been kinder to blunt the end first!
surely you can be more imaginative than calling him 'x'?????
For the trilogy -
Unlike so many sex writers, you actually have a sense of literary craft, and it adds so much to the experience.
Please keep writing, perhaps you can raise the status quo ;)
Well done.
Will.
Thorughly enjoyed this series Vicki!
Really well written, horny as hell and paced just right.
Zoe ;-) x
Great attention to detail! Ican picture the scenein my mind even now!!
It's so unfair to leave us hanging like that! :-) I'd like to hear how X took your ass!
Well written Narative and a great story all round though.