All Comments on 'Cam's Last Summer In Town Ch. 01'

**🙄PLEASE🙄!!!!

Why the clumsy switch to present tense? Needs work to take a airy fantasy into a readable story.

Sorry my first attempt doesn't meet your standards @chytown?!?! a little more feedback would have been great, or better yet... why don't you give us your best work? I am not here for you, just need to get thoughts down and out as a way to express myself.