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I lay no claims to being a writer. The story was just my feeble attempt to explain to the world the inner conflict and mental anguish that people live every day.
I wanted with this story to try and tell a story about love. Forgiveness is often seen as weakness which isn't always the case.
I wanted to show that with an open heart and an open mind anything is possible.
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- COMMENTS
Anonymous3 months agoYou guys are all morons I can't believe I wasted all day waiting for something to happen in this stupid ass story, what a fkin moron
LilMissChipmunk3 months agoYou know how at the end of a horror movie, the protagonist is driving away having finally escaped, but then all of a sudden the villain appears in the backseat causing the car to crash? That was this ending because there is no escape from Lauren.
Anonymous4 months agoAre there really people as fucked up as all of the characters in this story? I admit to having read chapters 1 & 2, and the last page of this whatever it was. Never realized how homophobic I be. No Bud Light for me.
NegateGivity5 months agoAfter reading the majority of Cagivagurls posted stories, I have come to the conclusion that she loves her characters far to much. She is so eager for them all to have a happy ending, that she has to force situations that don't really make sense.
Lauren should have never made it to chapter 19. Kelli/ Micheal's relationship should have ended when she moved in with Alicia for months. Not to mention the constant humiliation and put downs. Not to mention the drugging her husband, she was not a good person.
Kelli/ Micheal shifted half way through the story. Kelli at first seemed to be something like a drag persona. With Micheal wanting to stay masculine and occasionally be Kelli. But then he was forced to always be Kelli while constantly being belittled as Micheal. The reason they were comfortable as Kelli was because everyone close to him repeatedly told him that Micheal was awful and he should be ashamed of presenting as a man. It was a malicious effort to create Kelli and suppress Micheal.
Candy was the least empathetic transwoman. I was uncomfortable with the way she treated Micheal.
Siobhan is the only really sympathetic character. She had feelings for Kelli but was respectful of her relationship with Lauren. Honestly the whole Kelli, Lauren and Alicia relationship should have been cut out and the first divorce should have gone through. Then you have Kelli/ Micheal and Siobhan trying to start and navigate a relationship while building the company. All the while he has to deal with their ex wife and her lover on the board of her new company. Instead it was repeating the same toxic relationship over and over again.
And then you end with Kelli and Siobhan bringing Lauren into their relationship, and expecting different results. I understand you wanted to express forgiveness. But the scorpion always stings the frog. Lauren did absolutely no work to earn any kind of forgiveness. She was just sad. Being sad doesn't give her carte blanch to do what she did.
As the author you just gave it to her to secure your happy ending. Your plots are creative and thought out, but as I have stated your characters are inconsistent while also repetitive. I didn’t mean to critique so much, but I see a lot of potential in your work.
