All Comments on 'Canoe Interlude'

4 Stars. Nicely done, can't wait for second chapter.

Great tale about the beast with two backs. Loved it!

I gotta be honest. For a story of this length, there is too much backstory. As I was reading it, I thought to myself that there is no way even half of it is relevant.

I'm currently halfway down the first page {of less than a page and a half total} desperately wanting something to finally happen. All she's done so far is get in a canoe, take her shirt off in the heat, and drown us in high brow name dropping. We get it. She's intelligent and educated. There's nothing moving anything resembling a plot along. My interest is sapped.

You're clearly a good writer despite those two points, and I look forward to your next submission. Cheers.