All Comments on 'Captured Kitten Ch. 06'
by AlienLady
- 32 Comments
DarkTorinalmost 2 years agoThank you so much for the chapter!😍😍😍 I love it! 😍😍😍 We need more soon!😍😍😍 It's hard to find books like this..
HR1983almost 2 years agoThis story has REAL potential. The showing rather than telling is tastefully done, not overwhelming. Her struggle between resistance and submission is prime cognitive dissonance. His own dissonance is powerful without being overpowering.
In terms of feedback—technical issue, as mentioned by others one paragraph was mistakenly repeated multiple times which disrupted the story significantly. Easy fix.
You’re doing an excellent job of building up the current story with hints of the back story (two years not speaking to her family). Don’t loose those threads of back stories, and when the timing is right tie his in as well, but don’t rush it. The punishments are delicious, but use caution in severity and ensure that you return to the after effects (writing out the rules with bruised palms the next day would hurt like hell…)
Lastly, I am now getting a taste of my own medicine in terms of spacing chapters and going longer periods of time between posting. Please don’t repeat my unpardonable crime and abandon this story 😂
Also, just a publishing tip. I absolutely think this has the potential to be worked into a publishable novel. However, be aware that when it comes to erotica, and especially dark erotica, no publisher wants a one off. You could, of course, self publish—but the likely outcome is a pretty pitiful readership. Once you discover where the story is taking itself start story boarding immediately. Jot down ideas of scenes and story lines. If necessary write out of sequence and then smooth out the tie ins. Personally, the majority of my successful sex scenes are written at least in part at around 4 AM when on my cycle and hopelessly aroused, but find the jive that works for you personally and use it as momentum!
Anonymousalmost 2 years agoI’ve come back to read this so many times! It’s so hot! Looking forward to more!!
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Aqua317over 1 year agoI know sometimes life interferes, but I hope you don’t give up on this story. It’s so good!
Anonymousover 1 year agoReally liking her resistance and like that you're focused on the BDSM action over filling in more backstory. Some minor feedback. Aim for consistency - she often doesn't address him as master and sometimes he ignores it and sometimes he doesn't. He told her to kiss his cock first, but she didn't do that. He has to consistently enforce his rules to be a credible dom. Some of the rules state the consequences of not being followed ("I will never run away from my master. If I do, I will be given a permanent reminder of my place.") and others don't ("I will obey my master at all times." -in ch 1, he stated that she would be punished if she didn't obey). I believe he added a new rule that she needs to ask permission to come. Also, it looks like "Sir" was added here as an additional address but she's only addressed him as master. Most readers won't notice but these minor inconsistencies will pull some readers -like me- out of the story and are easily addressed during editing. I sincerely hope that you will continue the story!
Anonymousover 1 year agoI forgot to add that I love that he acknowledged that just because he possesses her and she's his kitten, that doesn't mean that she's not a person - too many of these stories turn the submissive into nothing more than an animal. Whilst Kate may at times be treated that way as punishment, it's heartening to know he does view her as a person.
Anonymousover 1 year agoPlease update soon!!! It's hard to find books like this!!! More!!!!😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍
Fibroidkey794over 1 year agoReally hope you continue this someday, love every bit of it. One thing I would like to see Mal do to further degrade and drive the point home that she's his kitten is make her wear a catear headband and possibly a tail plug.
Anonymousover 1 year agoThis is the first time I’ve ever commented… please add more to this story. I read the whole thing in one night and woke up replaying everything in my head. Kitten has a purpose and her Master is so patient in helping her accept it. I imagine myself in Kitten’s place and would want everything exactly as you’ve described it. Thank you and I hope there is more soon.
Anonymousabout 1 year agoSo very slowly she lets her true desire take control. Its not Mal taking control, its her slowly yielding to her inner self. She almost belongs to him, and soon she will find contentment and happiness when she fully submits. I hope she falls in love too, then all will be perfect for her.
Lovely writing, certainly deserves a 5.
Anonymousabout 1 year agoMal needs to die.
I keep reading with hope that Kate will end him.
I'm waiting for it with each chapter. She has had a couple of chances, and she will get more I'm sure.
He is careless and way to sure of himself.
Do it Kate! Do it.
AIMSJET6 months agoPlz plz plz write lots more of this story! I love it. Almost identify with a lot of the feelings in it...
