All Comments on 'Catering for a Stag Do. Ch. 01'

Boring, it seems to be going nowhere.

so she was the "good girl" when they met and I guess all thorough the marriage yet when they had trouble and the fight it was SHE that said they were stale in the sex and suggested they do role play?

Keep up the good work mate. (Wellington here) Cheers.

Foolish premise and equally poor writing. By the way, if you're going to split the story at least do so at an interesting point.

HOT story!!! Please, go on soon ;)

Very good first chapter, love to see more

It was a good first effort. It was s bit predictable, and I prefer complete stories. 3

A rather blah first chapter with nothing much of interest, other than foreshadowing that the story is headed for crapper. I hope I'm wrong and you turn this into a decent and interesting story, but I won't be holding my breath.

Roll play, inocent wife, are some egregious spelling errors. Wife sharing smells like a cuck story too.

Much of the lead up details are pointless and not worth the bother. You've established that this young couple have sexual relationship issues that they think are improved by pretending to be fucking strangers. That's like people with financial troubles entertaining themselves by pretending to rob banks or embezzle from their employers. When temptation and opportunity present themselves, and they think they can get away with it, one or both of them are gonna do it. And why not, its so much fun pretending its real, really doing it will be even better. All predictable and stupid. And reading about stupid people fucking up their marriages is not very entertaining, unless you enjoy reading about other peoples' misery. And that's fucked up. As usual it will be the kids who end up really getting fucked. Can't wait to read how erotic and thrilling that is. Thanks for the effort.

3 stars from me, mate. I would strongly suggest that you find an editor to help you proofread your work before you submit it to make it more polished. The misspelled words (e.g., "roll-play" when is should be "role-play", "Virginia" when it should be "vagina", etc.), the run-on sentences, and misused punctuation marks are all detracting from what could be a good tale. I also agree with the comment that you suddenly ended the story at a weird point, rather than a suspenseful moment. I look forward to your second effort. Cheers!

Do all Aussies have a Virginia rather than a Vagina.

good start

Thanks for your writing

To the Anonymous 5 days ago yes the Aussies do have Vaginias but the Kiwis (which this author is) have vaginas. There is a huge difference between Aussies and Kiwis much to the surprise of the uneducated

Good start despite the unfortunate spelling error 😉

Tess (uk)

A CUCK AND A WHORE WIFE

Why are people critiquing this chapter for events that have not happened? Maybe she eventually cheats, with or without his blessing, but it hasn't happened this far in the story. Also, this is a Loving Wives story - if you don't want to read about cheating wives, then find another category! I personally don't like cuckold stories, but I wouldn't critique a story in this category because the wife cheated; that's like critiquing a Lesbian story because two women had sex!

No clue why people who hate cheating wives read stories in this category…go elsewhere! Or get over it - it’s fantasy.