All Comments on 'Caught - Cleaning Girl gets a Show Pt. 01'

I found myself skipping over the excursion into the past because at that point I wanted to continue reading the story I started. I think it would be more appropriate if you had published the other story separately instead of inserting a flashback here.

Good start. Unlike the other commenter I enjoyed the side story! Very erotic!

I appreciate the feedback. This was one of my first two stories, I am still figuring out what readers want. I did add the side story later as I thought it needed more erotic content. I have tried to find a editor using the volunteer program, but no success, it's hard editing or even proofing your own work.

I am real excited about some of the upcoming parts of the story. I take it as a good sign of the erotic value of a story when I can't keep my hands on the keyboard when writing them. Pt 2 is waiting for approval and should be up by first of next week.

But too many different girls/women with too many tiny scenes that really seem unconnected.

Good premise.

But barely a beginning.

The sex scenes totally lack needed details.

And you really need to understand that BREAST is ONE. When you're talking about TWO, they're BREASTS.

Four stars. Being generous.