All Comments on 'Chamber Maid'

Excellent premise. Well conceived and written.

I picture you at a keyboard, typing away a mile a minute, your fingers vainly trying to keep up with your brain.

Your comment about needing an editor is correct. Trying to keep up, your fingers skip right over some words they should have typed.

After you finish a story, go back and read it out loud to your self in a voice using exaggerated enunciation, making sure to carefully pronounce every sound in each word. You should hear the missing small bits your fingers skipped over.

That said, I'd love for you to continue this story line. Does it end like Pretty Woman or do you have something more sinister in mind?

Keep up the good work and thank you for posting your stories.

Angus

I stopped around the blowjob. Too many mistakes.

"He wasn't you completely smooth."

You completely suck. Also, is the name mentioned?! NOT a celebrity story!