All Comments on 'Changed Ch. 01'

Its a great twist on the power of the ring standard

Excellent premise and story. So sexy, I can't wait until I see where you take this series.

I liked it! Although, to be fair, it is a little bit "I HAV TEH RING-OF-POWER! I am have teh SEXINGS with EVERYONE!" but at least there is a reason her life suddenly becomes filled with sex.

On an unrelated note, am I a jerk ifn I review every chapter of this story? Should I just put a comment on them all in the latest one? I'm new at this...

I loved it. It turned me on. But still the typos leap out at me:

Four hours late I finally pulled -- later (no deadline)

Tired and cranky form -- from

my self inside. -- myself

The place was dark, Julia wasn’t home yet. -- ; Julia

the bathroom I turned -- , I

important, or better yet it -- , it

Great see ya in -- , see

I was way too big -- It was

Scarred I tried to -- Scared, I

come off, it was -- ; it

I tried to clam -- calm

Panicked I stuck my -- , I

And that is just in the first few pages. If you want more, or less, just ask dick@cfcl.com and see if I obey. Remember, to get past my spam filter, put "nitpicker" in the subject line of any email to me.

Fine, sexy writing. I hope to see more.

Dick

..and so am I - hence my (bi) partner is Asian. I see there is often an Asian in your stories. Glad to see you are promoting diversity. I do wish you'd sort out the typos. I suggest you use an editor, they can really help. Keep up the sexy work, you have a strong imagination that needs tapping into regularly. P. Grimm

A few comments-

1. Nice premise. I think it would inspire a lot of stories.

2. Other people have said it, but it bears repeating: you really need an editor.

3. Asian women have brown nipples, not pink nipples.

Wicked

My idea many years ago also with women.This woman is so blessed with the gift of having any woman or women she desires in the shapes she needs to make every dream and wish to be ,come true!! Excellent story and I have not read the rest!