All Comments on 'Chapter 01: Cleaning Day'

Another In Vino Veritas story. Pretty tasty.

Part 2 is needed!!

excellent story. Maybe a part 2?

Oh God that was a great story. I loved every minute of it. You've got to do a follow up with the 3 ladies actually doing each other.

Ok. Needed more interaction.

Terrific, tender and sexy story. Love it!

You know what's worse than not having a chapter number? Putting it at the START of the title. If you write another multi-chapter story, this indicates you will have two stories that start with Chapter 01. Even changing the next one to Ch 01 would be little improvement.

Very wooden writing style, have you never heard of contractions? e.g. don't, we've etc.

Great story. Great groundwork to continue.

Twaddle.

It's so hot imagining tham so horny.

Please don't do that again - now you can't start any more stories with numbers, or they become irretrievably mixed. If you can't change the titles, the best option is to give them a 'book name' at the beginning, e.g. Becky's Family Fun: Ch.01 Cleaning Day. Add a note that these are re-loads of <Old Title>, with a few edits (you do need some), and many will go through the list again.

Great story. Loved the mother-daughter contact, the neighbor made three so hot.

Good idea, but there was a little too much head hopping.