All Comments on 'Chapter 02: Screwing up'

For a Gary Stu, your protagonist is fun. I have no idea where this is going but I want to find out. The crucial thing is - why would Esther go off the deep end, especially knowing what "Nick" is capable of?

Not a Romance so far. The breakneck pace and way too many character names make this difficult to follow. Who is Sybil? How many chapters are you planning and are they all written?

Great story.

I would buy this book in a heartbeat.