All Comments on 'Chapter 1: Birthday Season Begins'

Well, don't just sit there. I want more of the story!!!!!!!! Thanks

Using a chapter number at the end of a chapter is good. Using it at the beginning of a chapter is fucking stupid.

Pretty good story other than the obvious errors. On page 2 Amy is 5'9, but on page 3 Amy was just over 5' tall.

I simply can't wait to read the next part ❤️ what a start wow , x

Lost me at D&D.

Admittedly, I'm not a gamer in any sense of the word, but all the D and D crap ruined the story for me. That part was really boring and I skipped through the last 4 pages or so, to pick up the story in the last 4 paragraphs.

2 stars only.

Sincerely,

B4PW.