All Comments on 'Chapter 4: Helen'

Sorry, the MC is a fool. Buying loyalty? This got off to a good start but am disappointed with this chapter. The idiot is thinking with his cock. I know he is overwhelmed but he needs to take a time out and think. A fool and his money are soon parted. It's your story so take it where you want but I'm not inclined to continue.

"His men would follow him anywhere, if only out of morbid curiosity."

I am withholding judgment until all the parts are in. Watching and waiting.

Storyteller0112, I'm not sure what you're referring to. That quote isn't in the story

And just lie that Helen secured the entirety of his fortune by getting pregnant from this encounter lol. Marcus you've gots to be more careful lol.

Reading some of the comments here, some folks are relating too much to reality. I don't often enjoy long protracted stories. This one intrigues me though because it is well written which keeps my attention. In other words, I'm enjoying the tale for the fantasy and not just the sex. I feel the author is doing what they can to inject some reality into our hero's caution in a fanciful fairy tale.