All Comments on 'Cheap Shot'

Your writing is technically pretty good, BUT...it was very hard to figure out if the narrator or the "you" is male or female. Someone 2/3 of the way down addresses "you" as "dude" so I guess "you" is male, which I am not. Maybe I'm wrong. It's hard to know.

I have no idea what "DTF" means and you use it multiple times.

I know this "you" thing is trendy at the moment and everyone is jumping on this bandwagon, particularly the fanfiction sector, but when I'm being told I'm doing things I never did, or often would never want to do, I check out.

This was super hot, and great writing. By the end I wanted them to get together as a couple. I would totally read a book about their adventures!

"I check out."

lol. Okay, bye!