All Comments on 'Cheating Co-workers'

by ADonovan

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AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Good premise.

But the sex was too brusk in starting.

Needed more in the way of teasing/foreplay/preliminaries before they got too far into it.

Needed something like her asking him if he ever thought about her while masturbating? How often? What did he imagine doing to her? Him doing to her?

Does he like her breasts? Why doesn't he show her how much?

Can he smell how excited she is? Would he like to taste?

Frankly, the oversized cock added nothing except disbelief.

Four stars.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

How do the words committed relationship and cheating go together? They don't, simple as that. This is nothing more than yet another cheaters story written by a newbie. It belongs in LW, not first time.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

No, I do not agree. Just two miserable assholes. Wish nothing but the worst for both of them.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Cheaters, no romance, absolutely nothing entertaining about it. A wasted first effort. The description was my first clue. Committed to their marriage and cheating? I don't think so.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

I'm reading this in a library with a very hard cock...

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Obviously used too many times. Gets quite annoying.

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