All Comments on 'Cheating Hearts Ch. 02'

A few things an editor could easily clear up for you, but you're really doing quite well, all things considered. You're right about love scenes being tricky, even in one's first language. I wonder which language is your first. Five stars.

Why the double hurt.....both taking her, and then rejecting her! Pretty sad...hope you can make something good come from the hurt and pain..or am I being to romantic.

Make sure that Luke makes it up to her.

I love this story my only problem is it's way to short. LOL, LOL

Can't wait until the next chapter.

I agree with others too short. Great start like to see where this goes.

Damn some men can't handle a good thing. Luke get over it and apologize to Jasmine for being an ass. This is good story please continue.

This is a good story. Luke however didn't use a condom, so will she be pregnant or not. Can't wait for the next chapter. Please update soon.

that you said that English is not your 1st language. Very, very well done.

She managed to give him the unexpected, DAMN!!!

the story kind of drones on a little, but I am still reading to see where it goes. From what I have read it is edited well. BUT.... many stories that had bad editing did a little better grabbing the attention of the reader. what threw me off was the use of certain speech " cannot" and the use of what we used to jokingly call in college "school words". Its like everybody has asperger's . relax the speech a little. common speak makes your characters more relateable in the respect

English not your first language..? Interesting because I have read stuff from satellite English cultures that looked more

like English was the second language.

You have eloquently expressed a variety of human emotion and I will read on for that reason.