All Comments on 'Cheating MILF Swallows Load'

You would benefit greatly by getting an editor to review before you submit. Great story concept, very sensual.

You can do better. It wasn't a bad story, but rushed. Re-read your work and you'll get rid of most of the stupid errors, and there were many. Flesh it out. It seemed like you just were in a hurry to publish something. Change your goal to write a good story, not just publish something for the sake of getting it out there.

A bit rushed but otherwise good.

Need an editor - hard to follow with all of the misspellings

Great story i really like this :D