All Comments on 'Coincidence Happens'

Story was horrible. First site he already wanted to divorce her and in the end he enjoys everyone else fucking his wife. Worst line ever: "There were tears in her eyes when she looked up at me, "Did I not just tell you that I love you? Did I not just tell you that I won't go to him? Have you lost your trust in me? Because if you have, then you've given up on me and I don't know if I can stand that. " How the fuck could he ever trust her? Everything she did was with consent. There was no blackmail here. She did consent to everything. I mean, they had for 9 month no sex and she had an affair for 6 month. And he still believed her, because she is a terrible liar. How didnt he notice it everytime she lied to him about ther lacking sex life? Stupid story.

This was rotten as fuck

Good fantasy story

Decent story just too damn long.

Stupid! The husband solves his problem by making his wife a whore? Don't think so.

The husband is written as inconsistent as a dashed line and the wife is a bimbo slut. With no characters worth reading about an a completely idiotic story line, there is no literary value to this abuse of words.

I try to be objective in analyzing the efforts of writers to get their ideas down:

Did they write well in terms of the writers' workshop kinds of criteria (grammar/syntax/spelling/ consistency/etc.) In general I'd say that was done fairly well, so maybe a medium 4 on that.

Secondly, was the idea of the story logical enough that a reader could suspend judgement (Literotica IS about erotic FANTASIES, after all) and (sort of) accept the plot development of the story as being realistic enough as to make sense. As a couple of other readers have commented--the plot twists and inconsistency of this area are too noticeable to ignore. I could only give this story a rating of 2 in that regard. Do the math and that averages out to a 3.

So far as to how the characters themselves were described/presented (bimbo/thug/insecure cuckold/unrepentantly "hot" wives/etc.) THAT WAS HOW THE AUTHOR MEANT FOR THEM TO BE IN ORDER THAT HIS IDEA OF THE STORY WOULD PLAY OUT AS HE ENVISIONED IT). To criticize a writer for creating characters which an individual reader might find repugnant or contemptible or admirable or weak or strong or masculine of feminine or homosexual, bisexual, straight or any combination thereof? Come on, guys. How else can we find a Huck Finn or Gatsby or Indiana Jones or Lara Croft or Modesty Blaise or Juliet or Elizabeth the 1st? THAT'S THE WRITER'S PREROGATIVE--and more power to all of you who make the effort. So far as I'm concerned you're all in the running for Olympic honors.

Thanks IJSO904 for this tale. Kudos and more please.

Good Job....The story flowed well and held my attention start to finish....Thanks

Cheeky bit of fun. I liked it

This effort was fucking stupid. Not even a realistic possiblity. No way in hell. zero credibility, note even entertaining at all. Crock of shit.

"I could care less if that son of a bitch lives or dies. I care about you." The phrase is actually, "I couldn't care less". Writing "could" implies that you DO care, at least to some degree. It's a common mistake.

No matter how will written, trash is trash

Great story no matter what is said. Thought it a little strange that Miranda went from the angry wife to the willing wife. Her time with big Stan was erotic and she didn't seem forced at all. Neither did Debbie although she had been 9 months without sex and her husband was shit. Miranda, after professing her love to Jeremy, and her anger at the perceived affair with Chasey, was an eager participant with Big Stan. In the end she proved herself by refusing Big Stan and encouraging Chasey and Jeremy, Debbie and Jeremy, Lee and everyone, quite the story and I loved every minute of it. I will now read the rest of your stories.