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SparksWillFlySparksWillFlyabout 11 years ago
Three AM in the Morning

Unfortunate redundant start. Say that sentence to yourself without "in the morning" and see the style improvement. Erotic repartee is always welcome. Try more story and character development next.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
Crap

Sorry, there's no other adequate word. Please write no more. You can't.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Really hot but then..

Ruined it at the end

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