by firebird68
This story would play better on the cnc forum. The level of detail that you went into for the guys oral sex was intense and nearly half the story but when it came to the lady getting hers it was brushed over... almost like you had to but didn't want to (kind of like real oral, I've noticed for guys who don't enjoy giving but love receiving).
What's your problem? Your hatred of women makes for a sour reading experience. The name of this site is Literotica. Erotic. Got it!
This is clearly abuse. There were no negotiations, no safe words and he didn't stop when she asked him to. This is NOT BDSM. This is a rape/abuse fantasy.
I liked it but it played kinda weird. I was expecting more BDSM. I liked the sex but I don't know. I think you needed to spend more time on building their relationship, You hinted at her being sub with the way she reacted to him in the coffee shop but I think you needed a bit more before we jumped to the nookie.
is there more?did Katie revisit this man? is there a plan for chapter 2?
Well. Either pay a pro or find a 'needy' girl like Katie. I prefer the latter personally. I enjoyed the story. Looking forward to reading how she gets anoth 15k for tuition.
3 Stars
DragonRider55
I hope that you continue. I would like to see where this story goes.