All Comments on 'Coming Home Ch. 04'

Great start to this story. Read the first 4 chapters. Thanks. I’m not going to nit pick. Ill let the trolls do that. Keep writing, keep sharing. Thanks

Love it so far! This is gonna be a long one, isn't it?

I'm glad your enjoying my story. I'm having so much fun writing it! I do plan on making this a longer story and I'm keeping my progress updated in the bio of my profile. Chapter 5 has just been submitted!

I had to downgrade my score this time due to lack of depth explaining more of Sean's prior relationships with girlfriends or something that explains the quick dive into incest. Generally, I like the different plot lines and "get" having his mother out of his life may lead to a different view on their relationship. I don't get the now infatuation over Zoey, and how it relates to his mom. I'm also a bit confused about the kids ages. I "think" he's the oldest and the two girls are fraternal twins born soon after his birth. That said, you had a reference in this chapter about the other sister being older? (I may have just missed it earlier...) 4*

Still not much a 3 again

Not much to it so far a 3

Where is this going??? gave it a 3