All Comments on 'Commercial Sales Ch. 01'

Good start but too short.

Well we all know where this is heading don’t we boys and girls?

Good beginning!

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The foreshadowing in this tale is like a old slasher flicks where the teenage couple on a date run out of gas right in front of the haunted mansion where there was a mass killing many years before. I think poor ol' Mark's head might be itching...right where Kate's gonna attach a set of horns. And not longhorns.

So far so good, could get interesting. Keep up the good work.

I smell Femdom agitprop….

I smell Femdom agitprop….